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PostSubject: Spork This {Iron Man (The Avengers) - Picture Perfect By Fang2013} Spork That   Wed Aug 21, 2013 11:31 pm

Now, I haven't sporked a thing since last summer so it'll be stepping out of retirment for me. Hopefully, my snark and opinions stayed in tact during that break uvu Now, let's see what we're working with~!

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“Yo, Stark!” You walked through the open door to Tony Stark’s room. Tony scrambled to shut a book he was gazing at.
“Ever heard of knocking?” He choked out. You eyed him suspiciously.

“Why? What were you doing?”

“Nothing.” Tony shifted uncomfortably.

“Liar.”

“I swear! I’m not doing anything!”





Something ain't right here. The fic barely started and I can tell how butchered this is gonna be

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“Staaaark…” You walked over to his desk. He snatched the book up as you were reaching for it.

Anthony Stark!” You put your hands on your hips.

“Who are you, my mother?!”

“Just let me see it!”

“No!”



Ughh, the dialog is so scattered and awkward. Usually when you get reeaal dialog heavy you're suppose to keep the characters at least have their own thoughts and what not, this is painful


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As the two of you were bickering like siblings, Agent Romanoff and Hawkeye passed by…
“Hey, kids.” Romanoff barked. “Fury wants to meet with us. Now.” Tony got up, giving you a chance to grab the book. The triumphant feeling in your chest shattered into a thousand pieces when you opened the book. An album. Stark’s family album.

Pictures of Tony and his family. He and his dad. His dad’s inventions. Stark as a kid.

“Awww! You were adorable!



*dying whale noises*
If I read another Avenger's fic where Natasha is put in a bad light I'm going to scream. The Black Widow character was a riot in the comics who *spoiler* ditched the Avengers after /running/ it! She was portrayed pretty well by Scarlet but for some reason everyone just pegs her off as, well, this!

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“Uh, yeah.” Stark’s eyes cut from the album to Romanoff’s face. She rolled her eyes. Hawkeye seemed rather amused.

“Little Tony!! So. Cute!” You gushed. “What happened?” Barton laughed, but getting a glare from both Stark and Romanoff shut him up. You flipped another page. “Oh, my gosh. Is that Steve?!


she has more oneshots, Loki, Thor and Cap.
Precious Cap
Oh God please don't ruin Cap for me
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Extended Ending

“Steve looks pretty good for around 90 years old.”

“Oh, good grief.” Tony mumbled. Natasha shot you a look, and Hawkeye began to laugh again.

“Well he does!”




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PostSubject: Re: Spork This {Iron Man (The Avengers) - Picture Perfect By Fang2013} Spork That   Thu Aug 22, 2013 12:51 am

Annndddd this is my official reaction to this fan-fic:


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PostSubject: Re: Spork This {Iron Man (The Avengers) - Picture Perfect By Fang2013} Spork That   Thu Aug 22, 2013 1:16 am

None of this makes sense WHAT SO EVER!!

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PostSubject: Re: Spork This {Iron Man (The Avengers) - Picture Perfect By Fang2013} Spork That   Thu Aug 22, 2013 2:02 pm

I know, it's all so scattered and uggh generally hard to follow!
The personalities of the characters are just so warped!

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PostSubject: Re: Spork This {Iron Man (The Avengers) - Picture Perfect By Fang2013} Spork That   Thu Aug 22, 2013 5:00 pm



WHAT DID I JUST READ...? It made NO SENSE...Some writers, honestly...

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PostSubject: Re: Spork This {Iron Man (The Avengers) - Picture Perfect By Fang2013} Spork That   Thu Aug 22, 2013 5:10 pm

I do love how Tony is not an ounce in character, much less the brief cameo's of anyone else.


Even if it's a short drabble/one shot, it's not hard to keep a character in character!

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PostSubject: Re: Spork This {Iron Man (The Avengers) - Picture Perfect By Fang2013} Spork That   Fri Aug 23, 2013 2:45 pm

"Oh, good grief!" - Totally canon things Tony Stark says

Especially in something thats purely dialogue!

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PostSubject: Re: Spork This {Iron Man (The Avengers) - Picture Perfect By Fang2013} Spork That   Fri Aug 23, 2013 3:18 pm

I totally saw a Captain America one to spork on Fang2013's profile.

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